# Test-Reader Feedback Form

## Whispers from the Sand: A Tale of the Nameless City

**Edition:** Test-Group Editorial Edition v0.9.1  
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**Format used:** EPUB / PDF / DOCX / HTML / Print / Other  
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**Date started:**  
**Date completed or stopped:**  

Thank you for reading. The most useful feedback identifies the exact chapter and passage where your reaction occurred. You do not need to suggest a fix; explaining where and why the reading changed for you is enough.

## Overall reaction

1. Did the story remain clear from beginning to end?
2. Where were you most interested or emotionally invested?
3. Where did your attention weaken?
4. Did any chapter feel repetitive, rushed or unnecessarily slow?
5. Did the ending feel complete and earned?
6. After finishing, what do you believe happened to Leila?
7. Did Elias's final account feel honest, self-serving, or both?
8. Did you understand what Marcus wanted and why he kept taking greater risks?
9. Did the city feel like a real civilization with different people and motives, rather than one undifferentiated monster force?
10. Was there anything you expected the book to explain that it never addressed?

## Character checks

For each character, note any moment when a choice felt false, unclear or inconsistent.

- Elias:
- Leila:
- Marcus:
- Nabil:
- Marot:

Which relationship carried the most emotional weight for you?

## Clarity and continuity

Please flag any place where you lost track of:

- Where the characters were
- Who possessed an object
- What an object did
- Who knew a fact
- How much time had passed
- An injury or physical limitation
- The route through the city
- The difference among citizen groups
- The gate, chain, fragment, compass, journal, tether, cameras or recorders

## Pacing and chapter structure

- Strongest chapter(s):
- Weakest chapter(s):
- Chapter where the story fully pulled you in:
- Chapter where you were most tempted to stop:
- Any chapter opening that repeated too much information:
- Any chapter ending that felt forced or predictable:

## Horror and atmosphere

- Which scene was most frightening or disturbing?
- Did the horror build gradually enough?
- Did any explanation reduce the mystery too much?
- Did any ambiguity feel frustrating rather than intentional?
- Did the city remain strange without becoming impossible to visualize?

## Ending

- Did Marcus's death work emotionally and logically?
- Did you understand that Leila did not choose to become a noble sacrifice?
- Did you understand what Elias means by “I released her”?
- Did the investigation clarify the climax or repeat it?
- Did the final three-two-one beat work for you?
- What feeling remained after the last page?

## Specific issue report

Copy this section for every issue.

**Chapter number and title:**  
**Opening words or short excerpt:**  
**Issue type:** factual / continuity / confusion / pacing / character / dialogue / world or lore / object or evidence / geography or action / mechanical / formatting / other  
**What interrupted the reading:**  
**What you believed was happening:**  
**What remained unclear or unconvincing:**  
**Suggested correction, if you have one:**  
**Severity:** stopped me / seriously distracted me / minor distraction / note only  

## Typographical or formatting errors

Please provide the chapter and exact sentence or opening words. Screenshots are welcome when the problem is specific to a device or format.

## Final recommendation

- Ready to publish after minor corrections
- Needs another focused revision
- Needs significant story revision
- Unsure

**Reason:**