# Test Reader Feedback Form

**Book:** The Caveman Chronicles: Book One: The Fire Beneath the Stone  
**Edition:** v0.9 Test Reader / Candidate Production Draft  
**Reader name:** ______________________________  
**Date finished:** ______________________________

## Overall reaction

1. Did you want to keep reading? Why or why not?


2. What was the strongest part of the book?


3. What was the weakest part of the book?


4. Did the ending feel earned?


5. Did you want the next book?


## Confusion

List any place you were confused. Include chapter/page if possible.

| Chapter/Page | What confused you? | How serious? |
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## Pacing

Where did the story slow down, repeat, or move too fast?

| Chapter/Page | Problem | Too slow / too fast / repeated |
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## Characters

Which characters felt strongest?


Which characters needed more clarity or emotional weight?


Did any decision feel unbelievable?


## World, objects, and rules

Did any object, clue, injury, location, or rule seem to disappear or contradict itself?


Did the world feel clear enough to follow without overexplaining?


## Dialogue and voice

Did any dialogue sound unnatural, too modern, too similar, or too explanatory?


## Chapter ratings

Rate only if you want. 1 = weak/confusing, 5 = strong.

| Chapter | Rating | Notes |
|---|---:|---|
| 1. The Quiet Valley |  |  |
| 2. The Fire Moves |  |  |
| 3. The Sea That Remembers |  |  |
| 4. Red Dust Under the Dead Star |  |  |
| 5. Where the Ground Has Teeth |  |  |
| 6. The Forest That Was Built |  |  |
| 7. Ash on the Tongue |  |  |
| 8. Smoke Through Pines |  |  |
| 9. The Drowned Stair |  |  |
| 10. The Word from Red Stone |  |  |
| 11. The People Below |  |  |
| 12. The Road Under Leaves |  |  |
| 13. The Chant at the Old Camp |  |  |
| 14. Salt in the Bones |  |  |
| 15. The Scar Where Fire Fell |  |  |
| 16. The Mushroom Sun |  |  |
| 17. City Beneath Green |  |  |
| 18. Teeth of the Sleeping Door |  |  |
| 19. The Fire-Horn |  |  |
| 20. The Last Island Song |  |  |
| 21. The Word That Opens |  |  |
| 22. Lower Than Roots |  |  |
| 23. The Tree That Held a Star |  |  |
| 24. Blood at the Seam |  |  |
| 25. When All Fires Leaned |  |  |
| 26. The Last to Look Back |  |  |
| 27. Boats Over Broken Water |  |  |
| 28. The Exiles of the Red Star |  |  |
| 29. The Warning from Below |  |  |
| 30. The Green Road Opens |  |  |
| 31. The Ash Priest |  |  |
| 32. The Basin of Old Smoke |  |  |
| 33. Many Fires, No Shared Tongue |  |  |
| 34. The Stone Heart Beneath the Basin |  |  |
| 35. The Wrong Opening |  |  |
| 36. The Fire Beneath the Stone |  |  |

## Final notes

Anything else the author should know?